Question: Was this a good song
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Topic: The reaper
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#1 - on May 11, 2012. 03:47
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Im the reaper im a soul keeper. I keep all souls thats why im so cold on this lonely road. I have no soul thats why i steal others yo. When your alsleep i go in your room to steal your soul so i wont grow old. Im so cold i cant die im just like a ghost sometimes you see me other times you dont. And you wont once i turn into the reaper your soul is mine to dine on. I will be just fine when i dine on your soul but i think you wont be fine you might die. And your family will cry and i will say goodbye. I got my revenge im turning into a monster i will throw your dead body in a dumpster. The reaper is coming for you. You better have i clue what to do when he meets you. He will feast on your bones like a ice cream cone.
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#2 - on May 11, 2012. 17:22
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Lol, hello. Welcome to the forums.

You could've organized that a bit better. Is it a song or a paragraph? Try writing it in stanza's or organize it into verses and choruses.
#3 - on May 11, 2012. 21:48
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Thanks for the info
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#4 - on May 12, 2012. 00:24
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not bad
#5 - on May 12, 2012. 00:31
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Its so hard to come up with songs
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#6 - on May 12, 2012. 00:44
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a tip is recording yourself first, then listen and put what you've come with on paper. Writing while thinking of rhymes burns ideas and consumes more time, also when you are writing, don't keep reading what you've already made over-and-over again, that also kills ideas and makes you stuck on what you've done so far.
#7 - on May 12, 2012. 00:51
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Agreed with the others. Some areas deserved to be halted. Period behind a certain point, then think of something to place after that or continue where you left off.
#8 - on May 12, 2012. 01:40
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Thanks for the tips
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